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Animation: Maraya Run by DeyVarah Animation: Maraya Run by DeyVarah
WORK IN PROGRESS!

During class last week I randomly doodled a run cycle in my sketchbook and when I came home I fotographed it and tested it as an animation. Surprisingly it worked quite well so I decided to make it a run cycle animation for my character Maraya, obviously before she acquired that leg injury.


I used a slow motion video of a cat as reference material, mainly to fix the error in the order in which the paws hit the ground. Maraya is "left-handed" meaning her left frontpaw is the first to hit the ground.

I've still got a lot of stuff to fix about it, animate the face and add the hair and all that... but I wanted to share what I've got so far in hope you guys might spot mistakes where I've not noticed them so far :) Feel free to critique but please do keep in mind it's still work in progress!

Currently 10 frames
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for a work in progress, this is really good! im very impressed!! the only thing i can say about it that is negative (and i really dont want to be) is that she seems a bit stiff and light weighted (forgive my english: i suck at writing) hummm, so here is what i noticed: so yeah, as you said the face should be animated, the ears being still makes this look a bit weird. the neck and shoulders look really stiff and while it is true that the back side should be very bouncy, the shoulder part should remain lower and less bouncy. and if its a fast run, i think the head should be a bit lower as if to make herself more aerodynamic haha.. when the front paws hit the ground and the moment right after it should look more as if she is putting her weight on them, she might drop and go a bit closer to the ground, flexing her legs more. as for the back paws, they are pushing the whole weight of the animal; her hips or bassin (or butt?) should be closer to the ground as she pushes off and would extend more and this extention movement would be faster. one more thing: this extention movement im talking about, when her back paws push off, her head should be closer to the ground, making it less bouncy. when we see tapes of felines running, i feel as though their head bearly moves and stays at the same level or distance to the ground, while the body blures from movement (on fast tapes). ooooh! and the timing of the paws: the front paw to back paw time sould be shorter than the back to front paw time (extention lol or "stretch"). and be carefull with the long tail! please feel free to ask me about anything you find unclear! good job with this!

ok so this is an amazing work and i feel really bad for having written so much, this being almost perfect. i hope you understand that me writting this much just means im very observative, a bit chatty and have not hing else to do at 2:30 in the morning;it does NOt mean that this is badly done, cos lets face it, its very realistic! i dont like having to critique things, scared the other person will feel insulted or as if his work is shit. THIS is absolutely AMAZING. and i only wish i can be at this level of drawing one day. i just want to point out that the little details im picking out are TINY details :) this is really good and i cant wait to see a second version of this, if you do one!!
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BlackLightning95 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist
owo das sieht toll aus :) wie lange hat das denn gedauert bis du den ganzen rennkreis hattest? O.O....echt toll^^
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nicht sooo lange, aber es ist auch alles andre als perfekt ^^
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BlackLightning95 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist
also ich finde es sieht einfach super aus^^ ich mag deinen style :D und sry für das ganze spamen xD
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ach, kein Problem ^^
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Underworld-Wolf Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wooow! Like did you use just 10 pictures?! :O Pretty cool!
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, lazy me ^^ Thanks though!
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wezenbeesje Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Professional General Artist
Nice detail. What I see is the tail not really 'waving', it just goes back. Not very realistic. Maybe you can fix that?
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks. This is pretty old so when I work on it again, it'll get a complete do-over ^^
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DragonsPainter Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
-squeals- I can actually critique you on something! :la:

Lets start with the good things.

Those back legs look amazing, and there movement looks very realistic!

But those front legs look off to me, the shoulder does not rise and fall as much as it should, and the neck and head are staying in the same place to much (not moving around as much as the rest of the body) Its true it does stay in place more then the rest of the body, but it still does move with it.

Anotherthing that I am not sure of is that tail. I dont know what kind of tail you where aiming for, but you got a cheetah tail, which may or may not match the character c:
cheetah tails are very stiff, and stay in place while the cheetah runs, making a sort of rutter, whereas most other felines have a much more free moving tail, that moves up and down with the body.

I am by no means a expert animater, or head even a novice one, but that's what I think you should work on c:

Here are two videos you may want to watch, they show more of what I am trying to say xD
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! You make perfectly valid points, several other people pointed them out before. When I finally decide to continue this I will definitely keep it in mind! :) Also thanks a lot for those links, they look very helpful! ^-^
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DragonsPainter Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:'D glad I could help!

cant wait to see more like this in the future! :la:
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RagLove Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
I LOVE it! :love:
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BluefireTheCat Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome
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leeman10 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
You are so talented
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Deadkity Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is amazing and it gives me hope. that maybe i can do the same. cause you are an inspiring artist. and you have made me want to start drawing lions. instead of wolves. but lions seem easier then wolves. so i put my art in to lions and maybe a bit more of African animals. although i dont have a realistic style on wolves. so my commissions will be in my cartoon style. but i just started on lions. so i still have to look at a picture a few times before starting the painting. i also use photoshop. but sadly its not for drawing. this one is really actuality for photos. but i will be using it. i can still animate on it. and do more. but i could use a lot more skill on shading because i am not that good with shading. i am 12 years old so you mite be like oh shes not going to be that good of an artist. and then just leave. but please give me a chance. and look at this please!! [link] now i did that on Photoshop. [link] i did this one one paint tool sai. which it was just a free trail so i dont really care about it anymore. but i am a big fan or your art work. and you are a very sweet artist so i thought maybe you could read this. i have talked to you before and i was honored just to do that ^^

only if i actuality got to meet you. that would be nice. im so sorry that this comment was so long. i just wanted you to take a look and give me some tips on how to do this. i just want to be a great artist like you and others. :D

i hope this wasnt to long for you. thanks for reading :) btw love your comic :D
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey, uhm thanks for that long comment... not sure how this was in any way related to the submission, but oh well.
I took a look at your stuff and for 12 you're not bad at all! All I can really tell you to do is keep going, you're on the right path ;3
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Deadkity Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you<3 and ya i am sorry my comment wasnt related at all. but i think i had a comment in the past on that deviation. about how amazing the art work is :D and i am trying to get up to a better stage. im not like most others were they stay on one style then. dont see that they can do better. but i look at you and other good artists and say to myself i can be like them if i try hard enough to. i still have to have a picture to look at but thats not going to stop me from trying :P
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queen-of-nine-skies Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
What programm did use?)
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I believe I mentioned in the comment that I used Photoshop :)
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queen-of-nine-skies Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Oh, thanks)
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snowfox41011 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student General Artist
You can actually tell how light weight this cat's run is by looking at the animation, very hard to capture ;) Anyways, can't wait to see a finished, refined version!
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ViolePandora Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing, as always
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jewlecho Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The main thing I've noticed so far is the the stiffness of the head. It just really bugs me, lol.

But really nice work so far!
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's not animated yet xD
I will fix the movement when I do that.
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jewlecho Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohhhh, ok! lol
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firestarshine Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
cool
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Desrteskimo Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Filmographer
i feel one of the main things I would work on is the front legs, they don't seem to solidly plant on the ground when she runs.. they kinda just go through it.
another small thing is the tails movement. it should make a stiff 'S' movement.
other than that I'd say your pretty on track for a work n progress! the back legs are splendid :>
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'll try and put a bit more weight to her frontlegs, however since she is a very light weight cat and is supposed to have an easy and relaxed run rather than a powerful/energy-intensive one (hope that makes sense to you) I'm trying not to put too much weight in there.
The tail's movement will be fixed for the next step, hopefuly ^^
Thank you!
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Desrteskimo Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student Filmographer
oh, I wasn't meaning weight, I was thinking more that her paws don't really look flat on the 'ground' in the animation, the toes just barely brush it it looks like :>
but of course! I understand what you mean
and no problem :)
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Alright, I'll try to "ground" her paws a little more :)
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AbstractArtist4302 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The head looks "stuck in place" the entire time while running. But this is very good! But remember to really bring the entire piece of art to life by adding some life to the head as well, remember to always go down and forward with the head when the legs are extended forward! Remember to not make the movement stiff!

This is very well done, Just remember to make her seem more alive in the finished product! Make the detail of the moving legs, fur and bunching up of muscles really pop!
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The head is not stuck in place, however it is not moving enough just yet that is true. I said in the artist's comment that it is not yet animated either.
Thank you for your input, however for future reference "remember to really bring the entire piece of art to life" and "Remember to not make the movement stiff" aren't exactly helpful critiques since it gives the artist no clue on HOW to do that. I get what you mean, but others may not.
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AbstractArtist4302 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
So sorry! I'm new to the field of animation, I really tried to give my best feedback but I still have no idea what I'm really talking about. I think I worded it wrong. ^^; I apologize,
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No worries, I don't have much experience with animation myself so I appreciate all the help I can get. It just has to be worded in a way that it's actually helping ;3
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AbstractArtist4302 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, I get where you're coming from. xD
I am quite silly with words, so amateur at using them in such a way!
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Linkark Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok. If I where drinking any beverage at this moment, I would spill it over my keyboard!
This looks fantastic!
I hope you make more animation. It would add a new dimension to your works.
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hahaha, good thing you weren't drinking then! And thank you :)
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Linkark Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :w00t:
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Rasa88 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Always bring the head down and forward when the front legs are extended, other than that this looks great!
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KoinuPuppy Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really well done!
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :)
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Neara-works Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
so far it's really good sometimes i have problems with keeping the muscle lines on the body looking the same from frame to frame but this is looking so awesome! your soo good at cats :}
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much :)
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ksheridan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Professional General Artist
Yeah, like some other people have said, the backbone is too rigid from skull to tip of tail. Her legs look spot on though.

Its pretty cool. :)
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're the first to say the backbone looks rigid actually. I've put quite a bit of curving and stretching on it and I don't want to overdo it.
Thank you though!
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ksheridan Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Professional General Artist
Don't be afraid to overdo it when you animate! Usually the frames are moving so fast the exaggeration really helps get the feeling across. To me her legs say "sprint" but the rest of her body says "light jog."
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yeah I know that exaggeration helps with animation x3 I have little experience however and still need to find the right balance for it.
I'll try and make the rest of her match up to her legs ;D
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CarmanMM-Dirda Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Professional General Artist
Can't wait to see it done :)
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DeyVarah Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Me neither xD
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snowfox41011 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I bit more curve in her hindquarters I would think!
Also at one point her head goes back right after it really should, other than that it looks GREAT! I can't wait to see it when you're done tweaking and whatnot!
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